Untitled (Suppose I Ask) (excerpt)
Suppose I ask you
What color the stars
were in your part
of the galaxy.
Do I need a
notion, like an
undertaker and
the cause of
death?
Can I take a hint?
It was one vague
night. I sit
here with a beer
and bad luck
blue eyes.
"It's such a simple
suicide."
This youth, it's
an uncomfortable
phase. Makes me
feel like I'm always
struggling for
some kind of
clarity.
Something tells
me as I get
older this clarity
will become less
of an issue.
Maybe it will
smooth itself
out.
But...
Suppose I ask
you what color
the stars are
in your part
of the galaxy.
I will get fables,
half-truths,
maybe excuses.
Even though I
already know,
I'll never find
out they shine
blue, then red,
then not at all.
This passage is a haunting blend of cosmic wonder and existential dread, where the writer crafts a voice that feels both intimate and universal, as if whispering secrets into the void. The fragmented structure mirrors the speaker's struggle for clarity, with short, staccato lines creating a sense of breathlessness, like someone grasping for meaning in the dark. The repetition of the opening question—"Suppose I ask you / what color the stars / were in your part / of the galaxy"—frames the piece as a cosmic inquiry, but the answers are elusive, slipping between fables, half-truths, and excuses. The imagery is striking, particularly the shift from the cold precision of an undertaker to the warm, melancholic glow of "bad luck / blue eyes," which anchors the cosmic musings in a deeply human moment. Themes of youth, suicide, and the search for clarity are woven together with a raw honesty, making the emotional impact feel both personal and profound. The closing lines—"they shine / blue, then red, / then not at all"—are devastating in their simplicity, capturing the fleeting nature of existence. The only misstep is the abrupt transition from the cosmic to the mundane ("I sit / here with a beer"), which feels slightly jarring, but the writer's voice is strong enough to carry it. Overall, this is a piece that lingers, leaving the reader staring at the stars, wondering what color they really are.
—mistral-small3.2:24b, 2026-09-01