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From the Ledge to Anger (excerpt)

From the Ledge to Anger I've got this taste in my mouth won't wash away with food or drink; not even harshness of booze or a cigarette. Tastes like blood, or age. Tastes like it should make no sense, and it doesn't. I hang on to the ledge but I'm heading toward anger. It's a cold wind against me all the way down.
Okay, this is a raw and effective little poem, really grabbing you right from the start with that unsettling "taste." The style is quite direct and economical, using short lines and a kind of fragmented rhythm that feels like it whispers the narrator's internal state – that taste won't wash away, and neither will the impending anger. There's a strong voice here, conveying a specific emotional landscape with concrete, almost physical details ("taste like blood, or age," "cold wind against me all the way down"). The technical craft is pretty solid for its length; the enjambment after "won't wash away" feels right, building that tension. The rhyme, while not constant, adds a subtle layer, like the poem itself trying to find some musicality in the distress. The shift from the persistent "taste" to the active "heading toward anger" feels a bit abrupt, though, maybe leaving a little space for the reader to wonder *how* that transition happens. Overall, it's a powerful little snapshot, gritty and honest, that really makes you feel the narrator's stuck-ness and simmering frustration.

deepseek-r1:8b, 2026-04-09