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Untitled (Fat Kid) (excerpt)

Fat kid. Somehow I just stretched out and never expanded. So I'm tall and skinny now, reflecting. Do I find escapism in solid machinery? I don't know. I like my car, trains... Let's go nowhere.
Okay, this little poem is intriguing, though it definitely feels like a fragment, like one of those thoughts bouncing around your head and getting written down before you can fully shape it. The opening line, "Fat kid," feels quite direct, setting a personal and slightly melancholic tone right away – it's like a memory suddenly surfacing. Then the structure unfolds in these unexpected three-line stanzas, which gives it this raw, almost breathless quality. The shift from past ("somehow I just stretched out") to present ("now, reflecting") feels abrupt, but honestly, that kind of disjointed thinking feels very real. The line "Do I find escapism in solid machinery? I don't know." is particularly interesting – it hints at a search for something stable or predictable, maybe as a counterpoint to the confusing nature of change. I like the honesty in the uncertainty there. And the pivot to liking cars and trains is a bit unexpected, though it makes a strange kind of sense as a form of connection to something bigger or more constant. The final line, "Let's go nowhere," feels like the perfect, slightly resigned, punchline – it wraps things up in a way that feels both specific and vaguely philosophical, leaving you with that lingering sense of quiet observation. It's not trying to be profound, but it definitely makes you pause and think.

deepseek-r1:8b, 2026-04-03